Thursday, October 27, 2016

Halloweensie Entry!


I love Susanna Hill's contests. Thank you, Susanna! This year, I tried something new. I do not write in rhyme. I can't tell if the lines are anapest, dactyl or Dr. Seussian, but if I follow a mentor text (Langston Hughes happens to be one of my favorites), I can pull it off (shameless plug for mentor texts).

This year, I used as a mentor text the "Water, water, everywhere," stanza from Samuel Taylor Coleridge's The Rime of the Ancient Mariner. So here you have it folks, my 98-word Halloweensie entry using the words spider, moon and ghost

Spiders, Spiders, Everywhere
by Johnell DeWitt 

Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
On spindly legs they creep.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
A festival to keep.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
The Hallowball begins.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
With leaps and twirls and spins.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
They hang the moon with lace.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
And weave a ghostly face.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
They catch a tasty treat.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
And wrap it up to eat.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
They party through the night.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
And scatter at first light.
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
You feel that on your cheek?
Spiders, spiders, everywhere,
Don’t look or you might … 
SHRIEK!

If you want to see more about using mentor texts and learn about an upcoming mentor contest, please visit my site: https://johnelldewitt.com/2016/10/27/mentor-texts-and-a-contest/

29 comments:

  1. Oooh, spooky! I wouldn't want to be in that story. I would shriek.
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  2. I love the repetition with a story scattered inbetween the repeating lines. Well done!

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    1. Thanks. I've been loving your drawings. Really fun.

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  4. What a great job you did, writing this spooky, spidery Halloweensie story! Good Luck!

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  5. Oh my, Johnell...I am NOT a fan of spiders...but I'm definitely a fan of your story!

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  6. Spiders gotta have fun, too! Fun visuals, Johnell.

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    1. Yep. So long as they have fun away from me. :)

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  7. I would definitely be the one shrieking if the slider were on my cheek...great story!

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  8. Johnell, I don't rhyme a jot, so I extra envy your rhyme-y talent. I can so see this as a song for little ones.....easy to remember and fun to act out!

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  9. Now I have an old 80's song stuck in my head. And that's not a bad thing. ;) Great story! Good luck and Happy Halloween!

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  10. Oh my goodness, I wouldn't be standing still that's for sure if one landed on my cheek...lol. Great job. Good luck.

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    1. Thank you. I'd be out of there too. Not a fan of creepy crawlies.

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  11. You've spun a wonderful spider tale!

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  12. Oh my gosh! Is there something crawling on me? I feel like there's something crawling on me! :) Nice job, Johnell! Love the Hallowball! And how they hang the moon with lace! (And love The Rime of The Ancient Mariner! :) ) Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie fun.

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    1. Thanks, Susanna. I love your site and your contest!

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